Alcatraz Chapter Fourteen
The Alivened Attack
And here the action picks up again.
I love me a good action scene. There's something very fun about constructing action on the page. Partially, I think, because it's tough to do. In a movie, you can make the visuals happen the way you want to. However, in a book, you have a real fine balance to walk. You want people to be able to imagine the action, but at the same time you can't include too much, because every bit you include slows the action by a proportional amount.
This action scene is my favorite in the book. True, there aren't a lot to choose from here—it's not like Mistborn, where there are more fights. However, this one really works for me for a couple of reasons. First off, we've just had a lull in the book with lots of interesting—but not very fast-paced—things happening. Second, we get a good character climax in the middle of this scene. Third, there's a real sense of danger here.
Again, it's nice that the first few things Alcatraz tries don't work. It's a frustrating metaphor for his life that he has so much trouble. It seems that the harder he tries, the worse things turn out for him. That's just perception, of course—effort is rarely wasted in my opinion, even if all it does is improve you as a person and your ability to work. However, as Alcatraz sees things, he often gets beaten down when he tries. So he's stopped trying.
Up until here. The fact that he doesn't just give in is the show of what I told you in the last few chapters—it is supposed to reinforce that he really is changing. That he does care. And that caring is now driving him to channel his Talent.
You should know something.
And no, it's never a good idea to interrupt the flow of a good action sequence with a random interjection. Except here, when it's funny. Remember Roger Rabbit's law: You can do it—break any rule—as long as it's funny.
Pathological martyrs at a grenade testing ground. Hands down. Or blown off. Whatever. (I know it's a pretty random one, and probably takes too long to figure out to be worth its laugh. I still like it, though.)PreviousNext