Annotation Mistborn Chapter Four Part Two
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Chapter Four, second half
The other big part of this chapter is, of course, the plan. This is where the story has been pushing up to this point. I worry that even still (despite several cuts) this section feels a little too much like an info-dump. I couldn’t really get around that, since Kelsier is–essentially–dumping some information on the crew.
This is also where I begin to diverge from the ‘heist story’ framework. I started with that concept to write the book, but as I proceeded with the plotting and the writing of the actual novel, I realized that the heist structure was simply too small to fill the larger concepts for the trilogy I was working on.
So, in rewrites, I came back and reworked this section to take to focus off stealing the Lord Ruler’s money. The truth is, Kelsier wants to overthrow the government and get back at the Lord Ruler. The money isn’t half as important to him. And, as the story progresses, you’ll see that the crew spends most of its time on the army.
Originally, by the way, Yeden wasn’t the one who hired the team. There was no employer–Kelsier just wanted to try and overthrow the Lord Ruler. The main way I took the focus off of stealing the atium (making this less of a heist book and more of a Mission: Impossible style book) was to put the focus on raising and training the army. Having Yeden be paying them to get him an army worked much better for this format.
In this chapter we also have the first mention of the Eleventh Metal. I kind of wish that I’d found another place for this, since the chapter is already filled with a long discussion scene. Yet, it proved to be the best place for it in the drafting process.
If you think that what Kelsier is saying here is a little fishy, then you’re not alone. Most of the crew doesn’t believe him either. I’ll certainly admit that there is more going on here–far more–than anyone suspects.
Hopefully, you noticed Clubs’s little ‘hooks through our throats’ line here. That one pops up again, certainly, and it has a nice little relation to the next time we see Camon’s lair.